Edward knew nothing about who he was, who had created him. Why he was the way that he was.
He had always known that he was different, it was obvious.
His face a map of scars and cuts, his hair a mess of black, a birds nest upon his head.
His skin was pale, like marble, never changing, not the slightest hint of sun could be seen on him.
He lived upon a hill, in a large mansion.
And he was unfinished, an artificial man. with scissors for hands.
He lived alone. Cast aside by the town, that lay in the valley beneath his hill. He overlooked these beings never getting close. They could not accept Edward, nobody could except her.
And she had crawled into his heart and broken it.
Edwards days consisted of cutting his hedges, and perfecting his garden.
A labyrinth of green hedges, shaped like large animals, giraffes, cats, chest pieces, and humans, anything that Edward would think about, he would create. They were his pride and joy. He also planted many wild flowers Daisy's, daffodils, Roses, Violets and Irises. No matter what season it was, Edward could grow them.
It was his own paradise, his own world.
One night Edward awoke to the sound of rustling in his garden .Which was unusual, as animals never dared to venture into his garden. Startled he quickly tried to get out of bed, an attempt that failed and resulted in him cutting his cheek, yet again. A small drop of blood hit the pale white sheets. It saddened Edward deeply, but he quickly forgot about it, as the rustling got louder. His room was dark, and musty from the settlement of dust, that caked everything in his house. ( Edward was horrible at the upkeep of his manor, for obvious reasons)
He made his way to the garden.
Moonlight spilled into it, illuminating everything with a soft glow. All the leaves shone under the night sky , almost glittering. Edward had never seen them look sooo…..well sooo magical. The cold air whipped around him, sending chills down his back. There was a shuffle in the depth of the hedges, right behind the large cat. He focused on his garden. Catching a glimpse of blue here and there.
Edward whispered to himself "whose there"
All of a sudden, color's begun to light up his garden.
Rays of light shot up from the leaves. Colors such as magenta, gold, silver, turquoise green and violet.
His eyes were blinded by the spectacle, he stood there stunned staring out at his hedges, that slowly came to life before his eyes. He watched as the cat ran around between all the other objects, playing with the giraffes, and the chest pieces….And there standing in the middle of it all, was a girl…..
She had long silver hair, that caught the light of the moon and stars. She wore a light blue dress, that was long and dragged in the mud..it clung to every shape of her body. She had large forget-me not eyes. The color of deep brown, like the richest soil. She was dancing, and playing with the cat. Her pale arms, flung into the air, the wind catching greedily at her hair. The cat, now slowly shrinking, and becoming more of a cat, then a hedge was surrounded by a cloud of ominous blue and purple smoke.
Edward was speechless and watched in awe, as the girl danced and played with all the creatures.
His heart, sending slight pangs throughout his body.
All of a sudden, the girl snapped, as if she had awoken from a dream. Everything stopped, the animals became hedges once again, except for the cat, the brilliant light and colors left, and the garden was restored to its now, not so magnificent state.
The girl stared at Edward…..he felt his face flush. ( a feeling he had only felt once before). All of a sudden there was an urgency in her walk, she almost ran towards him. She ran up to him, and wrapped her arm's around him, he stood stiff with shock. Realizing that he was un-responsive she pulled away. Then noticing his raw cut, she touched his cheek, wiping away the blood Her soft hands caressing his face.
She began muttering to herself.
“he’s waiting, waiting for me. I've found him, he's found…found…..found"
-where are you from? Edward spoke to her, almost in a whisper.
She looked at him, registering his face, as if seeing an old friend.
"Where all mad, from where i come from" she said, a wicked smile upon her face.
"Why are you here? he said.
"I’m here for you…..I’ve found you"
-for me?
“yes, many, many years ago. You lived in a place called the underworld, you were a brave knight, the bravest there was, who helped me conquer the evil queen of hearts, you out of the goodness of your heart did not kill her, instead you banished her and her lover to the never lands. You became a hero, and many people both admired you and envied you. After years of watching over our people and the village. The queens lover, returned one last time to our village, after being taught voodoo magic by the people of the never lands he cast a spell upon you. Replacing your hands with scissors, taking all of your memories, and sending you up the rabbit hole to this world”
All of a sudden. Flashes came back to Edward.
The girl with the silver hair, the cat, the caterpillar, the Queen of Hearts.
“…..Alice……" he whispered, chocking on the name.
He repeated himself again "Alice" now getting louder, until the name shook through out his whole body.
"ALLLLLLIIIIICCCCCCEEEEEE" he flung his arms around her, clinging to her frail body, being careful not to cut her dress.
“yes Hatter, I came back for you"
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ReplyDeletethis is a nicely written draft, just has a few rough edges like "chest pieces", and like you said, punctuation improvements that need to be made.
ReplyDeletei think this may be a bit superfluous to the story:
(Edward was horrible at the upkeep of his manor, for obvious reasons)
It was Good story I enjoyed it. I have not seen either film but I understood the story.
ReplyDeleteJust a few pointers
In the start of some sentersences you have not used capital letters.
Some of the sentersences could be worded a bit better "She wore a light blue dress, that was long and dragged in the mud." could just be She wore a light blue dress, that dragged in the mud.
I agree with William - a few punctual errors. You missed out speech marks here -
ReplyDelete-where are you from? Edward spoke to her, almost in a whisper.
:P
Your descriptions were detailed and consistent throughout the whole story which was great!
A nice twist at the end too which is always fun haha